Let me preface by saying this: don’t compare my comments to my own command philosophy as a better example. It’s always easier to critique someone else’s work than your own, and I’m not claiming mine is stronger.
What I liked:
• The one-page format is excellent—concise and accessible.
• The tone and structure are strong and resonate well.
• It reflects the current climate and priorities effectively.
Suggested improvements:
• The content feels a bit repetitive. For example, “We do what we say we will do” appears verbatim in both Character and Leadership. Empathy, accountability, and learning are also repeated across sections.
• Some phrasing leans into buzzword territory—lines like “practice habits that lead to great results” sound good but feel hollow without context or examples specific to this command.
• In aiming for brevity, you may have cut short the personal interpretation of these traits. For instance, how does being “lucky to wear the uniform” connect to enthusiasm in a meaningful way for your Soldiers?
• If culture is a driving focus, why is it placed last—and why is its format inconsistent with the other sections?
In the end, your philosophy articulates a wide range of admirable values, but it’s difficult to discern which ones are most important to you or how they should guide action when priorities compete. Without that clarity, it risks feeling more like a collection of good intentions than a focused command philosophy.
These are great critiques. I definitely want to avoid cliche statements and hollow jargon. I will refigure it to ensure that Character+Leadership+Judgement=Culture. That's the framework I was going for, but if you didn't see that plainly, then I didn't communicate that plainly. Thanks for the feedback!
Let me preface by saying this: don’t compare my comments to my own command philosophy as a better example. It’s always easier to critique someone else’s work than your own, and I’m not claiming mine is stronger.
What I liked:
• The one-page format is excellent—concise and accessible.
• The tone and structure are strong and resonate well.
• It reflects the current climate and priorities effectively.
Suggested improvements:
• The content feels a bit repetitive. For example, “We do what we say we will do” appears verbatim in both Character and Leadership. Empathy, accountability, and learning are also repeated across sections.
• Some phrasing leans into buzzword territory—lines like “practice habits that lead to great results” sound good but feel hollow without context or examples specific to this command.
• In aiming for brevity, you may have cut short the personal interpretation of these traits. For instance, how does being “lucky to wear the uniform” connect to enthusiasm in a meaningful way for your Soldiers?
• If culture is a driving focus, why is it placed last—and why is its format inconsistent with the other sections?
In the end, your philosophy articulates a wide range of admirable values, but it’s difficult to discern which ones are most important to you or how they should guide action when priorities compete. Without that clarity, it risks feeling more like a collection of good intentions than a focused command philosophy.
These are great critiques. I definitely want to avoid cliche statements and hollow jargon. I will refigure it to ensure that Character+Leadership+Judgement=Culture. That's the framework I was going for, but if you didn't see that plainly, then I didn't communicate that plainly. Thanks for the feedback!